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Good articleDoug Bentley has been listed as one of the Sports and recreation good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
Article milestones
DateProcessResult
October 16, 2011Good article nomineeListed
Did You Know
A fact from this article appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the "Did you know?" column on August 18, 2011.
The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that Reg, Doug and Max Bentley made history on January 1, 1943, when they became the National Hockey League's first all-brother forward line?

GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Doug Bentley/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Strafpeloton2 (talk · contribs) 03:03, 14 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I have started the review with an incomplete readthrough. The article passes the quick fail criteria: 1) all references are reliable, 2) there is NPOV, 3) no cleanup banners or tags, 4) no edit wars, 5) not a current event that will change quickly. I also spotchecked 2, 6, 8, 10, 11, 12, 17, 20, 22, 24, 28, 29, 30, 32 and 36 and there appear to be no copyright violations. All references seemed accurate.

I had a few comments/questions on the first time through:

  • "the 1st National Hockey League All-Star Game" – "first" should be written out
  • What type of injuries did he have in Saskatoon?
  • "Their son, Doug Jr., was also a hockey player.[38] Much of his time away" – In the second sentence "his" could refer to the son
  • "Bentley battled cancer in his later life" – What kind of cancer did he have? What type of operations were needed?

I will go through and read in more detail this weekend. Strafpeloton2 (talk) 03:03, 14 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Appreciate the review! I've addressed the first three. On the fourth, I have been unable to find any source that describes his illness or operations in detail, only that he had cancer and had two operations for it. Regards, Resolute 01:14, 15 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Looks good. I wasn't sure that one was possible. Strafpeloton2 (talk) 16:04, 15 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]


GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
    In general, the prose is very good. Since it’s up for GAN, I’ll get a little nitpicky, see below.
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
    The article is well-referenced. There is one quote where a citation is needed and two more that end paragraphs without refs (see below). The citations are good and there is no OR.
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
    The one image is not free-use, but it includes a rationale. I think it is appropriate in this case. Walter Payton and Sid Luckman are good articles with similar non-free images. There are no image captions, but one is not needed for the infobox image (the only image).
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

I think the article is pretty much meets all the GA criteria. There are a few minor things that would improve it:

  • Lead
    • "four post-season" – post-season is redundant
    • "in his career, was" – no comma and add an "and"
  • Chicago Black Hawks
    • I thought "Black Hawks" should be "Blackhawks", but when I looked into it, you used the correct historical version.
    • Could you describe or link "protected list"?
    • "among the worst amateurs to come to my camp" - this needs a reference
    • "farm for the duration" – does duration mean duration of the season?
  • Saskatoon
    • "Saskatoon's player-coach until 1955.” – add reference here; just reuse the one you use next
  • Coaching
    • "the WHL's Los Angeles Blades for the 1961–62 season." – add reference here; again just reuse the next one
    • "Saskatchewan home in 1964 where" – where shouldn’t follow a date
    • "Chicago's Herald American newspaper named him the city's top hockey player of the half-century in 1950,[3] and Bentley was inducted into the Hockey Hall of Fame in 1964.[11]" – This sentence seems a little out of place here. Personally, I’d put the first part in the Chicago section and add the second part at the end of the Saskatoon section.

There were a few cases where a comma should be removed or a subject inserted in the second half because it’s currently not a compound sentence:

  • "playing brothers, and at one point played with"
  • "boys, and one"
  • "scoring leader,[8] and finished second"
  • "deal, but felt he could give Chicago"
  • "until 1961,[29] when he"
  • "through the year, and even played"

I will put this on hold for now. It's only a whisker away for me with the unreferenced quote being the most important. Strafpeloton2 (talk) 16:04, 15 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

All should now be addressed, thanks! Resolute 22:36, 15 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I agree. I will promote it to GA. Nice work on the article. Strafpeloton2 (talk) 17:58, 16 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]